Critique my Newspaper article/ NBA Season Update?

This NBA season features one of the tightest Western Conferences, and the rise of a monster in the East (Boston Celtics). Trades in this season include Shaquille “The Big Cactus” O’Neal heading to the high-powered Phoenix Suns in exchange for Shawn Marion; Spanish star Forward/Center Pau Gasol heading to the L.A. Lakers in a seemingly impossible trade which dealt 2001 draft-bust Kwame Brown and rookie Javaris Crittenton to the Memphis Grizzlies; veteran All-star Point Guard Jason Kidd heading to the Dallas Mavericks in a blockbuster deal which sent Devin Harris and DeSagna Diop over to the New Jersey Nets; and a 3-way trade that sent Ben Wallace, Josh Smith, Delonte West, Wally Sczerbiak to the Cleveland Cavaliers, Larry Hughes and Drew Gooden to the Chicago Bulls, and Chris Duhon, Ira Newble, and Donyell Marshall to the Seattle Supersonics.


Now, on to my NBA regular season predictions.

Critique my Newspaper article/ NBA Season Update?
Really good!! Thanks for sharing!!


Just want to know one thing: Where is "Golden Phoenix" that the Rockets will be playing at? LOL


Maybe you need some re-read, to correct such things like that, but the overall is good.
Reply:Cool.


That was a good read.





But you should also re-read.


Because that's the most vital part of an article/post/column/etc.





That's your backbone.


And for the grade of 1-10, 10 being the highest, I give you 8.5





There's still a room for improvement!
Reply:Quite good, Although you should have gien a link so I can read it quite fully and effortlessly see reading chopped lines makes one dizzy at times. There is promise although there is much more room to improve.





Hope this helps.